Here is one of the good samples from last assignment (written by Gabriela -- thank you, very good job).
Here is my structural analysis (in short): the input caused a strong emotional reaction, and she acknowledged it.
But, she didn't freeze up. She was quickly able to delve into herself and she found in her own personal history (tribal?) the reason why she responded that way.
But she didn't stop there. Anger, disgust and revulsion are, in psychological terms, "primitive" responses.
She moved from the emotional to the rational. In this sphere, she took into account rational thought and knowledge of history and society, and she was able to put the new information into a context.
OK, my analysis is convoluted and hypercomplicated, but, you can see in her process how she went from emotion to thoughts to clearly articulated ideas.
In your COMMENTS, very plainly, say if you think she expressed her ideas clearly and if she was able to communicate where she stands in terms of her personal moral universe.
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Task 5: anti- Italian cartoons
When I first
watched the video of the Italian-American cartoons, I was undoubtedly shocked,
disgusted, and offended. Through all my years of studying history I had no idea
Italians were seen as such a “pest” to the American people. I was very offended
watching this because it made me realize that my grandparents may have faced
this horrible racism
when they first came to this
country, and I know they did not deserve it, since they were hardworking
immigrants. The cartoons depicting
Italians as lazy and rats made me feel particularly disgusted. From my family’s
own personal experiences here in America, I know they were not lazy. My great-
grandfather, Gaspare Mortillaro, was one of the two
elevator operators during the triangle shirtwaist fire who helped to save
hundreds of young girls from a burning building.
Hearing that people didn’t
recognize all the good that Italian immigrants did for our country shocks and
repulses me.
However, after thinking about it for a few
minutes, I realized that I really shouldn’t even be surprised. We have seen
immigrants up to this very day get scrutinized and hated for simply being from
another country. Today, Mexicans living in America, whether they are citizens
or not, fall victim to the harsh racism in this country. This made me realize
that although I am still disgusted and offended, I am not really as shocked,
because America has a history from the very beginning of discriminating against
anyone different.
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This is what you should strive for. SIMPLE, GENUINE analysis of how your own personal emotions become ideas. Because, that's the only thing worth writing about.